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Cold

For nights I have wondered,
what made you changed so drastically.
Like the season changing from summer to winter,
I can feel the chill in my bones.

I guess I know why you like winter now,
because your eyes snows and your features are icy cold.
The look in your eyes cut me like blades,
though the crimson flowing out of my heart will never show.

Is it too late to turn back,
if only we were like before.
All the warmth has disappeared,
abruptly taken away from me.

I wish this is just a nightmare,
It hurts too much to be reality.
Why did your warm eyes feel like icy blades,
cutting my flesh and causing me to bleed.

If only nothing had happened,
if only we still have love.
If only you’re as warm as before,
and your look doesn’t feel like blades.
©2003-2010 ~Mintblue
:iconmintblue:

Author's Comments

Lalalala~ I guess i'm sort of feeling pretty "winter-ish" since winter is coming at where i am staying now... ^^;

Well, i never make an effort for my poems to rhythm... so.. it doesn't rhythm! [Lame.] ^^;;

Anywayy, comments muchly appricated! ^-^

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:iconaquilier:
Very nicely written, and you managed to give me a good imagery... Well done! Be proud of it;)

Have a great day,
and take care!
:iconmintblue:
Thank you!!! *bow bow bow* :hug: Thanks! Have a grat day to~ ^.<

- Mintblue

--
Fish says," You can't see my tears, because i'm in the water.

Water says," I can feel you're crying, because you're in my heart."
:iconsingthesorrow487:
I love it....and very nice imagery!!!

--
So you make a mask,
A mask that hides your face,
A face that hides the pain,
A pain that eats your heart,
A heart nobody knows."
~Bang Bang You're Dead
:icondrahcir:
Nice!!!(as always)I guess you feel better now...
:iconmintblue:
Arigatou~~~! ^-^ Heh heh, yea, better. Thanks! ^^~
- Mintblue

--
Fish says," You can't see my tears, because i'm in the water.

Water says," I can feel you're crying, because you're in my heart."
:iconphoenixz:
oooh pretty!!!

I think it goes well with my picture^-^

--
"Kira...omae no utsukushisa wa sekaichuu no ichiban da yo." --Asuran
"Boku wa kimi no kaeru basho dakara, Asuran..." --Kira
See? They love each other =D

:iconathrunxkira:
:icondarkcrimson:
i like the song, but there is something i loooooooveeeee -- the word 'crimson' in the second paragraph X33 , *ego*, haha, just joking. btw, it doesn't matter whether you have rhythm or not, it's too common ^-^! and your stuff are unique! =D
:iconshf:
sorry but in my small little mind, poems shoudl rythme *sigh* I shalt call yours a song or a piece of literature... cool meaning
:iconmyst-o:
I feel chilly.. (O.O)

Kidding~!! (^v^)
Anyway, was that a poem or a song? (^^; )
Well, whatever it is, you describe the coldness pretty well...
Omedetou~! (^,^)b

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~ Currently Addicted to Gaia Online x3 ~

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